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She pauses a moment
at the window, surveying
the spread of rooftops.
The long summer dusk
lingers. She feels how
she balances on the edge
of gathering night.

She closes the curtain
swiftly, shutting out
the swelling darkness.
The room behind her
glows with subdued light.

She spends her evenings
alone with her solitude,
an imaginary brute
she has almost tamed,
still it sprawls among
the many trophies
of her collecting
zeal, indifferent
to all but the dumb
anguish of which it
is composed.
                    She will
borrow her passion
from her stereo,
As Pears expresses
What Britten felt for him.

Her life has formed one
long regretful sigh.
She wonders sometimes
how so much has passed
                             her by.
©2009 =AlecBell
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Author's Comments

This is piece is developed from ideas prompted by the workshop that :iconbeccalicious: ran at the London Devmeet

The woman by the window closing the curtains echoes an image in Wilfred Owen's Anthem For Doomed Youth

The character in the poem has some similarities with WH Auden's Miss Gee

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:iconmistakenmagic:
I was so glad you mentioned Owen in your comments otherwise I would have never picked up on the similarities! I'm studying Wilfred Owen for my English A level and Anthem is my favourite poem of his!

Loved the final stanza and overall swellings of loss and grief that the poem projects!

Erin xxx

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:iconalecbell:
Thanks, Erin, for your appreciative comments.
the Owen line is the last one of the poem:

"And each slow dusk a drawing-down of blinds."

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:iconpoisonedrose:
I'm so glad you developed this piece -- it really was a remarkable response to `Beccalicious's prompt, considering you had so little time to compose it.

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:icon3wyl:
I really like the atmosphere and the structure of this poem! You've conveyed the emotions and described it very well indeed. :)

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:iconyouinventedme:
the first stanza is my favorite

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:iconultimateoutlaw:
This is gorgeous, its like muted desolation and resignation to loneliness and you can feel it echoing in every word. I totally dig it.

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:iconalecbell:
Thanks for your very positive comment.

Sometimes things just fall into place?

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There's always a better poem just out of reach.

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:iconalecbell:
Thank you very much for such complimentary comments!

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There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconalecbell:
Thank you Shane.

The first stanza does a lot of the work in the poem.

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There's always a better poem just out of reach.

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The roots of the future run deep [link]

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