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A grey, haggard dawn.
Already you struggle with the rebirth
             of need.

It almost seemed that the impetuous
rush, the flash flood of consciousness,
had lifted you so high that you
could hear the very conversation
of the gods.

Now your ears are beset with jeering echoes
of bitter words, silent, scathing judgments
from tongues the earth has stilled.

The empty city spreads like a mausoleum
around you, its indifferent streets sprawling.

The wind’s keen scalpel probes the shallow
skin of clothing, insufficient to preserve your
                                   body’s dwindling heat.

Still you know that you can purchase
yet another dose of freedom from
the curse of ailing flesh. Icarus fell
only once from the zenith of his sky.
The gods in their mercy allowed
                                   him to die.
Response to Addiction, the nineteenth prompt on the list compiled by :iconbailey--elizabeth:

I decide to update the poem so the I could tell you that you can hear (and see!) me preforming the piece on Youtube here: 

www.youtube.com/watch?v=VwOMEy…
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:iconlancelotprice:
LancelotPrice Featured By Owner May 21, 2014
Allowing oneself the final dying; that is the difficulty.
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner May 21, 2014
Too true, Lance.
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TriciaS Featured By Owner May 20, 2014
A brilliant idea Alec!!I so enjoyed the reading which brought so much life to your poem!!:hug:
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner May 20, 2014
Thank you, Trish :hug::love:
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:iconansdesign:
ansdesign Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
So wunderful Alec and very nice to see you!
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
Thank you, Ans!
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:iconansdesign:
ansdesign Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
My pleasure for sure Alec!
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
:D:D
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful work, Alec! I get so burnt out on the Icarus references that people use so frequently but you managed to make it sound so fresh. Fantastic!
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
Thanks very much, Rachel :hug:
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) Nice.
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
:iconbowplz: Thanks, Ron!:
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Swep-Lovitt Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
alec:  one of your best. your last three lines are powerful, and just right. 3rd line, 2nd stanza, looks like you have a "to" in there that you don't need. good poem. swep
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
You're right about the "to", Swep, it's just too much.

Thanks for pointing the error out, now corrected :nod:
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Trippy4U Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
The gods in their mercy allowed
                                   him to die. :iconuaefaintplz: 

Excellence...the video too. The camera loves ya dude. You look much younger than in your photos.
Video Hint: cue cards...this way there would be a continuous rapport with your viewers.
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
Good suggestion, Richard, thanks very much!
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:iconsneds:
Sneds Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011
Wonderful.
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011
Thanks, Ned
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Sneds Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011
Pleasure.
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Obsidian-Nightfall Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011  Student Writer
A very well written piece my friend. I think you have taken the prompt somewhere were many others have not. Addiction is a popular theme in writing, especially in terms of the poetry on DA, but you have refreshed all that has come before. A very unique piece here. I especially admire the form but it is a great poem, well done...
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011
Thank you very much :nod:
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:iconobsidian-nightfall:
Obsidian-Nightfall Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011  Student Writer
My pleasure...
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kamcalste Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is incredible. Such an apt description of addiction, but without the use of any cliches or tired images...definitely something to be admired. The rhythm is fantastic - I love the way you set aside certain phrases, emphasizing them.

Truly wonderful. You, sir, have blown me away. :)
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2011
Thank you. :iconbowplz:
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:iconcalleighblack:
CalleighBlack Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. I'm blown away. This is amazing!
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2011
Thank you :heart:
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:iconcalleighblack:
CalleighBlack Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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:iconaquarius-claire:
Aquarius-Claire Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2011  Student Writer
God. This is so fucking true. And so fucking real. This is wonderful. <3
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2011
Thank you :heart:
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:iconprettycrazy:
PrettyCrazy Featured By Owner May 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
"Still you know that you can purchase
yet another dose of freedom from
the curse of ailing flesh."

Wow, Alec.
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner May 25, 2010
:heart::heart:
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:iconindiana-w:
indiana-w Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2009  Student Writer
The implication of cruelty in falling over and over is clever.
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2009
Thank you very much. I'm pleased you picked that up.
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:iconindiana-w:
indiana-w Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2009  Student Writer
You're quite welcome.
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:iconahavati:
Ahavati Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2009  Professional General Artist
the rebirth
of need.

The language in this is exceptional.
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2009
Thank you very much. Positive comment from someone as experienced as you are is very welcome.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2009   Writer
an incredible language you've conjured for this! the transition between the 4th and 5th stanzas is brilliant.
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2009
Thansk very much, Shane, for your comment, as generous and thoughtful as ever.
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:iconwhoapony:
whoapony Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2009
I love what you're doing with these prompts, Alec.
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2009
Thanks very much, Mary. There are only twelve more to go.

I'm trying to avoid streeotyped responses.
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:iconwhoapony:
whoapony Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2009
I think you're avoiding stereotypes very well. Each prompt has been dealt with in a manner that makes the reader stop and go, "wow, that's not was I was expecting." They are very well done :hug:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2009
Thanks again, Mary :heart:
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:iconwhoapony:
whoapony Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2009
You're welcome, Alec :heart:
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Already you struggle with the rebirth
of need.

profound!
how we are all bound to our incarnating need/s.
addiction...

i love this image:
The empty city spreads like a mausoleum
around you, its indifferent streets sprawling
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2009
Thank you, Natalie. :heart:
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MistakenMagic Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2009
'Icarus fell
only once from the zenith of his sky.
The gods in their mercy allowed
him to die.'


- Love the last lines. Truly haunting - plus I love any poem with Icarus imagery in it ;)

Erin xxx
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2009
Thanks, Erin, I'm please you liked the poem.
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