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Chinatown, The Rat Is Coming by =AlecBell:iconAlecBell:



Chinatown, The Rat Is Coming

1
The thunder of drums,
clashing cymbals, beating gongs,
New Year good fortune.

Through the narrow crowded streets
lion dancers are prancing.

2
See, young girls dancing,
Multi-coloured finery
swirling as they move,

forming patterns, dazzling
streetwise choreography.

3
A firecracker fusillade
shattering the afternoon.
Birds wheel in panic.

Deafened by the wonderful din,
the crowd is utterly stunned
©2008-2009 =AlecBell
:iconalecbell:

Author's Comments

As planned, I have enlarged the poem. It now becomes my February offering for :iconelectrobaby: for her Competition, A Year In The Making. The link below will take you to Misty's Journal, where you can find details of the competition.

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:iconnaaya-neko:
Aimi: I think you captured the occasion well. 8D
DO I SOUND SMARTS ENUFF? D8

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I passed by the window, and marked with one eye,
How the owl and the panther were sharing a pie.
The panther took pie crust, gravy and meat,
While the owl took the dish as his share of the treat.

SharedAccount
:iconpraytell:
written origami !!1!
:iconalecbell:
Wow!

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There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconpetertbexley:
I like the pared down images - it would have been tempting to overdo it

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The light of the body is the eye
:iconalecbell:
Thanks

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There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconcrypticwritings:
I like it, I like it. The lack of thick description is remiscent of the kind of mood being in such a celebration creates. Who's going to pay a lot of attention to one portion of the party when they can be looking at all the other attractions there too, right?

I think..

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yarnyarn nostrils
:iconalecbell:
Thank you.

Description is prose?

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There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconcrypticwritings:
You're welcome.

Depends on how it's done, maybe.

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yarnyarn nostrils
:iconfrazzled-mage:
I love the form you chose for your stanzas. I think it aided you in the tight imagery-the brief glimpses you give. Well written. I am going to have to work on my Jan. and Feb submissions ;)

jfk

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please stop by sometime :gallery:

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