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You are my mystery,
I can’t tell you what I see
when you gaze at me.

I’m lost in our dialogue,
lapped by our wordlessness.

2

Eyes speak quietly,
exchanging intimacies
yet to be explored.

Desire like electricity,
Lightning flash between our eyes



3

These empty eyes
have seen too much. Once they smiled,
dancing, full of life.

Now they stare from blank faces
white as kabuki make-up.


4

The destructive trance
of war has stunned them, their youth
has been stolen away.

These eyes, still living, able
only to see shades and death.
A response to Eyes, prompt 16 from the list compiled by :iconmiss-deathwish:

The full title of the poem was rejected by dA.
It's called Eyes (Love And War)

The stanzas of the poem are in tanka form
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deinktvis Featured By Owner May 21, 2010  Student Writer
i guess i missed this...an linked it to me. wonderful!
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AlecBell Featured By Owner May 25, 2010
Thank you :heart:

(some guy called Praytell commented on 18th June last!)
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deinktvis Featured By Owner May 25, 2010  Student Writer
:)
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:iconalecbell:
AlecBell Featured By Owner May 25, 2010
An identity of great minds?
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deinktvis Featured By Owner May 25, 2010  Student Writer
soooomethin like that :) applied for my passport:)
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AlecBell Featured By Owner May 25, 2010
Great! see you soon!!
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deinktvis Featured By Owner May 25, 2010  Student Writer
indeed :)
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PrettyCrazy Featured By Owner May 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Stunning...
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AlecBell Featured By Owner May 25, 2010
Thank you, An!
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Mokyn Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2009
I thought it was amazing. You had so many different ways of talking about eyes, whether the way some people can say a lot without words ("I’m lost in our dialogue,
lapped by our wordlessness." has to be one of the coolest things I have ever read) and then move on to how some people have very flat expressions because they have seen so much.

A very powerful piece, and I must say I loved it a lot.
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