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Keeping The Balance by =AlecBell:iconAlecBell:



Keeping The Balance  (For Pat)


1. Artless Elegance

In the way that
your body arranges itself
I discover meaning,

the way you lean
against surfaces
as though it
were their duty
to release you,
setting you free
from gravity.


2. The Tightrope Walker

He forges ahead
trusting the void
to support him;
knowing that only
the power of
concentration
keeps him alive.

Witnesses to
the miracle
ponder his secret;
marveling at
his ability
-willing him
to survive.
©2007-2009 =AlecBell
:iconalecbell:

Author's Comments

Imagine lightening sketches. That's what these little poems are

I hope a little bunch of syllables can help you see the subject, daring and heroic in his vulnerability.

Comments


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:iconnaaya-neko:
Aimi: I like the subtle rhyming in the second one, it's not too overdone and it flows quite nicely. ^^
:iconalecbell:
Thanks. You're right, it is a sort of camouflaged couplet. It's not easy to fool you!

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconnaaya-neko:
Aimi: Uh-huh. Totally un-foolable. That's me. *nods knowingly*
In fact, I'm so un-foolable, I can just make up words as I please. XD
:iconsoothingangel:
it helps me see the subject.
and you.


...but also,
I see myself.

you, here, have put things into words I can't.
the simple positions of their body;
the artlessness of it, they way it is a prophecy.
A tablet we cannot stop reading but forever strain to grasp...



keep it up, alex.
:iconsatah:
These are both very strong, very powerful. The first one is much more vivid, in my mind. It paints a very clear picture of someone.

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconalecbell:
Thank you so much

I don't know how I missed this comment when you made it. You must have thought that I was very churlish to offer no response. I can only plead my decaying brain as a mitigating circumstance.

When I comes to making words behave, we must take Humpty Dumpty as our role model.

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconalecbell:
Thank you.

Surprisingly the second one has more resonance for me. But then I knew him (if there was a him!)

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconblueskye27:
I love, love the first stanza, but I'm having a bit of trouble connecting the two. The personalities are so different somehow that I'm tempted to think they should be two separate poems.
:iconalecbell:
Thanks very much.


There was once a (very) young poet, as brave and vulnerable as young poets should be. He is described in the first stanza.

In the second stanza he is portrayed again, after his HIV positive diagnosis had been confirmed.

Personality can be very strange.

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]

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October 31, 2007
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