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Nightlife by =AlecBell:iconAlecBell:

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My footfalls in the city’s night-empty
streets strike echoes off indifferent walls
my senses strained, improvising fresh
grounds for fear from the empty silence.

The still air seems thick with the detritus
of countless wakeful nights, with stale
dreams, decaying nightmares, with
interminable, tormented insomniac schemes.

I am unable to silence my suspicions,
they tear at my flesh like thorns of briar.
And still the distance that separates me
from a warming fire seems immeasurable.
©2008-2009 =AlecBell
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Submitted: May 15, 2008
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Old old poem stripped down to the chassis and rebuilt.

16/05: Edit to the last stanza, as suggested by :iconmarzguy:

Thanks for your help, Mark
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~Effamay:iconEffamay: May 15, 2008, 1:59:28 PM
It's not just your wide vocabulary, but how you use it that I really like.

I was imagining someone walking alone, studying every detail of their surroundings for a sense of... company.

Great piece:)

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Dum spiro spero.
=AlecBell:iconAlecBell: May 15, 2008, 3:25:32 PM
Thank you very much, Emma.

I'm pleased you enjoyed it.

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There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations

The roots of the future run deep
*marzguy:iconmarzguy: May 16, 2008, 4:15:08 AM
"And still the distance that separates me
from a warming fire seems immeasurable."

Great line.

I see it as a finishing line.

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We’re having a poetry reading July 20th
“And The Whole World Is Invited.”
=AlecBell:iconAlecBell: May 16, 2008, 9:45:53 AM
Thank you, I've amended the poem accordingly.

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There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations

The roots of the future run deep
*marzguy:iconmarzguy: May 16, 2008, 2:45:41 PM
Wow. I guess you concur with the suggestion then.

Thanks for honoring me with your consideration.

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We’re having a poetry reading July 20th
“And The Whole World Is Invited.”
*Blueskye27:iconBlueskye27: May 17, 2008, 1:14:51 PM
It's so beautifully constructed, and the emptiness, the searching you capture in poem throws the title into a whole new light. Excellent.
=AlecBell:iconAlecBell: May 17, 2008, 2:17:14 PM
Thank you very much Cindy.

thanks too for catching the irony in the title.

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There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations

The roots of the future run deep
*Blueskye27:iconBlueskye27: May 17, 2008, 4:20:36 PM
You're so welcome. :heart:
=Naaya-Neko:iconNaaya-Neko: May 21, 2008, 6:53:53 AM
Aimi: It's cool, but what exactly is detritus? And for that matter, chassis? ^-^;;

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"I am never thrown out, and I don't leave quietly, I storm out! In a huff! And then I get revenge!"

-Serena
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