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A new day begins.
As the hours pass it descends
towards its dark end.

Each passing minute wave-like
breaks on the unchanging shore.
Commentary on Rocky Shores Of A forgotten Land by *Hermetic-Wings

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The poem started as a Haiku, but seemed to require the extra space of the couplet, so that it is now a tanka.
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Poelee Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011
Beautiful job, Alec! I The last two lines add a lot to the piece.
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011
thank you very much!
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HarisDrako Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011
amazing Alec:clap::clap::clap: !!! :worship::worship::worship:!!!:iconwineplz:
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DiamonEyes Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
:clap: A perfect match! :D
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
Thank you very much :thanks::sun:
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Trippy4U Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
:clap:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
Thank you, Richard!
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Tigles1Artistry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
Once again.... beautiful work to compliment a lovely piece.... :clap::clap::clap:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
:iconbowplz:
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Tigles1Artistry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
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Hermetic-Wings Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Sometimes a comment makes the whole submission more valuable...
The peom is so fits the photo my friend...thamk you so much for your kind coorporation and warm friendship
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
It's our mutual good fortune, Ayhan, that dA made it possible to discover each other's work :love:
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Hermetic-Wings Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
that's why I am a DA addict :nod:
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
"The poem started as a Haiku, but seemed to require the extra space of the couplet, so that it is now a tanka."

Tanka seems to be you favourite form of late. :)
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
So it does, Lance. Perhaps because a tanka contains an embryonic dialogue ;)
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
Could be. :)
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MagicBlanche Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
:wow: wonderful :heart:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
:iconbowplz:
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deinktvis Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011  Student Writer
superb in its serenity.
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
Thank you, Chris :iconbowplz:
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