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Tanked Up, 4: The Dead Captain by =AlecBell:iconAlecBell:



I jolt in waters;
a submarine the colour
of city Jodhpur.

Pale fish nuzzle and nibble,
Slowly the sea transforms me.
©2009 =AlecBell
:iconalecbell:

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The latest collaboration with :iconnightgrid:



She wrote the Haiku, I added the couplet

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:iconalecbell:
Thanks from both of us!

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconthetaoofchaos:
ha! the blue city.

this is the best between you two to date.

:heart:

--
The world is an eraser for these words


- Jack Kerouac


we must destroy that which contains us
:iconalecbell:
Thanks very much, Shane.

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconalapip:
almost, i had passed this by,
but "jodhpur" (faintly) caught my eye.
my father (high-topped) wore a pair
fashion after Gable there.

memories seeming "gone with the wind"
drifting back upon water.

the more thought brought,
the better the writing must have been...

pip

--
when a man refers to the woman,
[who chose him], as his better half,
for once, he tells the truth. - llp - nov'09
:iconcrypticwritings:
The couplet has a chilling reality to it.

Another great pairing of words between poets.

--
yarnyarn nostrils
:iconalecbell:
I'm pleased you liked it Rebecca. Natalie is a very good partner!

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconalecbell:
Jodhpur was known as the Blue City, because an indigo coloured pigment was added to the wash used on the domestic buildings.

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconalapip:
jodhpur, also a style of men's trousers,
made fashionable by Clark Gable, most
times sold in the colour later adopted
for hunting outfits and 'fisherman's waders'.

so both the watery blue and toasty gold are covered.

jodhpur pants are jolted by Jodhpur waters.

coincidence or intent?

:shrug:
pip

--
when a man refers to the woman,
[who chose him], as his better half,
for once, he tells the truth. - llp - nov'09

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