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Two Divided By One by =AlecBell:iconAlecBell:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


Your flesh, smooth like
a silken glove, moulds
to the touch. Is there
so much that I can
share with you? We
press close together
dreaming of boundaries
that meld in fusing.

Can we imagine
Plato’s story true,
that a unity existed
once for every stricken
two that struggles now
to undo finally that
ancient separation?

Yet both of us can
recognise the curse
that locates within us
two separated beating
hearts. We can smile
at the ancient philosopher’s
joke, knowing that
our isolation must
choke us eventually.
©2009 =AlecBell
:iconalecbell:

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A doodle that developed while my mind was on other things!!

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*Blueskye27 Jul 11, 2009, 7:02:54 AM
dreaming of boundaries
that melt in fusing

That is simply gorgeous...
:iconthetaoofchaos:
*thetaoofchaos Jul 11, 2009, 9:10:50 AM
i really like:

"Yet both of us can
recognise the curse
that locates within us
two separated beating
hearts"

and adding the "philosopher's joke" is a nice touch.

it seems to boil down to a curse and a joke. ;)

--
The world is an eraser for these words


- Jack Kerouac


we must destroy that which contains us
:iconamberous:
~Amberous Jul 11, 2009, 9:13:48 AM
Beautiful piece.

--
Time for Change
:iconanavah:
`Anavah Jul 11, 2009, 9:16:09 AM
dreaming of boundaries
that melt in fusing.

I keep wanting to read 'meld' to pick up the consonance of the d sounds in dreaming and boundaries. I know it's a bit different from melt, but meld would also add to the underlying meaning of the poem's two becoming one.

It's a lovely read, especially the reference to Plato.

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Thank you.
:iconemosunshinemuffin:
~EmoSunshineMuffin Jul 11, 2009, 10:33:30 AM
this is fantastic <3

--
i'm the calmest hue of purple :heart:
and the dullest shade of gray

~~EmoSunshineMuffin
:iconalecbell:
=AlecBell Jul 11, 2009, 11:04:18 AM
Thanks very much for your appreciation and your suggestion.

I shall consult dictionaries!

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconalecbell:
=AlecBell Jul 11, 2009, 11:06:26 AM
Thank you very much, Cindy :hug:

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconanavah:
`Anavah Jul 11, 2009, 11:06:43 AM
You're very welcome.

--
No need to thank me for "Faves" or Watches; however, if you feel the need, please do so in my Shoutbox.

Thank you.
:iconalecbell:
=AlecBell Jul 11, 2009, 11:07:21 AM
Life's like that for some of us?

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconalecbell:
=AlecBell Jul 11, 2009, 11:08:17 AM
Thanks very much.

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
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