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"The Clouds" Experiment by =AlecBell:iconAlecBell:



It appeared the room opened
                                  onto measureless space.

There, filling a massive screen, were roiling
                                   forms of cyan and magenta,

suggesting time lapse sequences, storm clouds
                                  writhing in accelerated time like spirit beings.

“What you see on this screen now is as insubstantial
“as those atmospheric clouds we’re all familiar with,

“but these do not exist in any world
                                  that we can have experience of.

“We have constructed  a virtual cloud chamber
  to capture echoes and reflections

“from other dimensions of reality. Where the source of these
  images might be, is a mystery locked

“in the formulae and equations that enable our software to “see”.
  You might say that we have

“built a interdimensional electron microscope
  to probe the many reaches of the multiverse.

“The math is complex, our algorithms need supercomputers
                                  to unfold in. Imagine fractals,

“then you might get a glimpse of some of the obstacles
  we have had to overcome.

“These mushrooming, transient shapes you can see,
                                   we had at first no name for, we called

“them harmonic dimensional resonances
                                   until a junior member of the team  

on watch for a commissioning run,
                                   spoke by chance  his deepest thought aloud

“You know,” he said,”These clouds are nothing
                                    more than condensed improbability”
©2009 =AlecBell
:iconalecbell:

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entry for DLD's Clouds contest

"I've looked at clouds from both sides now."

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:iconalapip:
Alec,

this is great, speaking of the
immeasurable size of the
knowledge we cannot yet, nor
possibly, will not ever know.
however this should not stop us
from the speculation, and
tentative spiritual use of these
theorizations. this allows us to
advance from the beliefs which
separate us, to the improbabilities
which should always include us all.

God, may or may not be great. remote
speculation IS great, if used to
anticipate our evolution forward.

in other words, if a large enough
percentage believe a thing is true,
then it becomes true, but only if it
first is karmically harmless; the
inherent doubt in a belief's potential
harmlessness would automatically
kill it. it could not become true,
because doubt would lessen that
percentage.

a message is only considered viral if
it does not contain the self defeating
arguments of harm, or impossibility.

see what you started, Alec?

pip

PS: i'm gonna post this comment as a
deviation to bring in more replies.
hope you don't mind. i shall link to
your excellent creation which started
these thoughts.

--
when a man refers to the woman,
[who chose him], as his better half,
for once, he tells the truth. - llp - nov'09
:iconalecbell:
I'm very pleased that you foud so much in my poem. Thank you.

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconalapip:
actually, Alec, it seems
you may conclude in your
poem that "condensed
improbability" is zero
probability. either
nuance seems to be there.
i allowed for the ideas
we may speculate to be
taken as possibilities
for us to use until
disproven, which is what
the Eastern philosophies
appear to do, (without the
dogma of various religions).

a nebulous spiritual way of
thinking allows the egoism
of theistic certainty to be
put aside.

the position of "knowing" one's
religion to be the one true
belief, is of course, personal
arrogance. it says that the
other billions of people in
the world are wrong and one is
right. to entertain no doubt
is to surrender to the needs
of one's ego.

two of these are my remaining
siblings. pride and paranoia.
literally... they live by
self image, neither having
any conception of their lack
of free will.

absolute spiritual certainty
is the result of fear of one's
own thoughts. llp - jul'09

pip

--
when a man refers to the woman,
[who chose him], as his better half,
for once, he tells the truth. - llp - nov'09
:iconfrazzled-mage:
damn...I was just going to tell you I enjoyed this new perspective...I think I have comment envy.

:rofl:

--
please stop by sometime :gallery:

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youarerighthereyouhavetakenthespaceoutofmywords
:iconalecbell:
Your comments are always welcome, James.

The poem grew from a determination to find a new approach to clouds. (One that didnt require too much lonely wandering)

When I thought about it, I found myself far beyond water vapour.

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconmarzguy:
This one makes my head swim. I'm looking for a beachhead and then those final two marvelous words...

condensed improbability


An original. Good job.

--
You don't have to read a book on fat rabbits
To be a fat rabbit.
:iconalecbell:
I'm not sure exactly what condensed probabilities might mean, but the phrase is in direct speech, so I could claim it wasn't me who said it?

It may have something to do with becoming visible, (or in some sense perceivable) which is what condensation does for water vapour?

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconalecbell:
Thanks, Mark.

You're welcome to put them to good use.

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconalapip:
Alec,

are you saying you are
quoting a real person?

besides, you wrote
"condensed IMprobabilities",
with i take as possibly
meaning concentrated zero,
or something like that.

anyway... :)

pip

--
when a man refers to the woman,
[who chose him], as his better half,
for once, he tells the truth. - llp - nov'09

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